Just need some honest feedback on this..story I want to write....."The candle that lights my way through the darkness"......
I cant pick just one thing beautiful about her. Its like a book thats so beautiful that it takes your breath away. A book so powerful it changes the course of your life. You cant just pick one page of it, just like I cant pick one thing about her. With every new detail I learn about her, every new page, I become more hooked and more fascinated. Its the book I tell everyone about, but no one gets how im depth every word has taken hold of me and refuses let go. Every new chapter we go through together is s milestone. I cant believe she looks at me with those eyes, like stained glass windows of a cathedral, so beautiful and full of soul, and says "I love you".
I cant pick just one thing beautiful about her. Its like a book thats so beautiful that it takes your breath away. A book so powerful it changes the course of your life. You cant just pick one page of it, just like I cant pick one thing about her. With every new detail I learn about her, every new page, I become more hooked and more fascinated. Its the book I tell everyone about, but no one gets how im depth every word has taken hold of me and refuses let go. Every new chapter we go through together is s milestone. I cant believe she looks at me with those eyes, like stained glass windows of a cathedral, so beautiful and full of soul, and says "I love you".
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morebacon · 9 comments
6 years ago
klymaxx
· 6 years ago
.....damn man, that's...really very good and so fucking sweet. Makes me want to meet this lovely woman you write about.
morebacon
· 6 years ago
Thanks! I think you're the inly one that likes it but your opinion carries a lot if weight with me :)
klymaxx
· 6 years ago
Wow really? That's cool to know :)
Is there more to it?..I would love to read it..if you feel like sharing.
Is there more to it?..I would love to read it..if you feel like sharing.
morebacon
· 6 years ago
Not at the moment. Just wrote the begnning this afternoon.
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· 6 years ago
Yo @morebacon I like it too man. It's amazing. And surely I would love to meet the lucky lady too, about whom you write.
funkmasterrex
· 6 years ago
That is one hell of an extended metaphor, I love it bro.
morebacon
· 6 years ago
Thanks guys! When I write the full story I'm going to thin it out a bit lol.
deleted
· 6 years ago
This is a great metaphor to start a book. What's the plot going to be?
kouyaaotsuki
· 6 years ago
I like it, although it's difficult for me to translate through your broken grammar... What will the plot be?
