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sure, as long as its not scary :))

Depends what it is. I probably wouldn't read it if you posted a link with no context.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sQgN7fg8KFNbv8kV6TKGKNspDgEVBtsdoPHXmmESGjE/edit?usp=sharing
This is about the daughter of a king that rules a snow-bound land. The whole book itself is called Snow. The daughter, Kloryn (try saying that aloud) is to rule the country one day, and meets two of the king's (or jarl's) freelance assassins. There's more lore behind the two, but I want to know whether or not you guys would be interested in reading that before I post it too. It's not scary, I can't write horror at all ^^'

This is an interesting beginning to the story! I enjoyed reading it, and I like the main characters so far (Kloryn and Emil). Emil appears to be caring of his subjects, and Kloryn sounds young and curious.

This bit happens after Snow, when Emil has his first daughter. Prior to this, before his marriage to Kyalare, she and her brother, Kaer, tried to kill Emil. They would have done it if Emil hadn't nearly killed Kyalare and restrained Kaer.
I've got a bunch of things planned for Kloryn, actually. She's to rule after her father gives up his throne to her, after training her as soon as she could handle it. After Kyalare's marriage to Emil, Kaer is pretty much..broken. Emil broke him mentally aftet the attempted assassination, as much as he didn't want to. He then sent Kaer back to his and his sister's homeland, Riore. Kloryn takes over Riore very quickly, with both the impressive Skvaldan army and her uncle's incompetant rule. I haven't written all that yet, though.

lol... chlorine.

does she eventually combine with ammonia?

Now that you mention it..

XD

BOINK BOINK

I read somewhere that Jarl is like Captain, not necessarily King. Maybe it’s a “leader” title

I'll work around it. Originally, I came up with Snow's concept while watching my dad play the Witcher, so a lot of things are still therebfrom the game.

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