Please critique my poem!
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mirita · 3 comments
5 years ago
mirita
· 5 years ago
Every black thought
Made with malice
Joins a river in my mind.
The river swells
And swallows its banks,
Drowning the shores.
I spent so long
Walking alongside it
Trying to swim across
That it took me eight years
To even consider
Building a bridge.
Made with malice
Joins a river in my mind.
The river swells
And swallows its banks,
Drowning the shores.
I spent so long
Walking alongside it
Trying to swim across
That it took me eight years
To even consider
Building a bridge.
mirita
· 5 years ago
There are supposed to be 4 stanzas of 3 non-rhyming lines lol
wimsyexpergefactor
· 5 years ago
I like it! The non rhyming has never really been my style choice, but it carries well with how you did it. Vivid imagery, and a really cool surreal setting. Good job!