"My long thick blonde hair with brown streaks in it"- a prime example of the description cliche. Other example:
"His bright forest green eyes locked on my ocean blue eyes, and I fidgeted in my floral print leggings and cardigan"
Don't forget that people can communicate with their eyes
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He shot me a look, his eyes telling me we had to go.
So my ocean blue eyes told him OK.
His eyes held a look of relief that I had agreed and I could see how the sparkle in his eyes were telling me 'yo mamasita wanna grab some froyo?'
I batted my long eyelashes at him, in hopes he would take that as a yes. His lovely green eyes lit up, understanding the message my eyes sent. 'I would totes love to get some froyo, lol' my eyes said.
One thing I hate about reading something, is when a character is too far away to see their eyes and the character who spots them can see the color of their eyes. It's like dude, they're either alien and shiny or that motherfucker has something more than 20/20 vision.
If you want to read quality fiction, Wattpad is certainly not the place. Not to mention stories revolving around real people are kind of creepy if you ask me. It seems wrong to mess with someone else's life like that...
I have read many Great Fanfictions, I just don't read does with real people involved. Often times when I mention fanfiction to people, the first thing that comes to their mind is stories about band members or actors. That bother me because the world of fanfiction is so much bigger than that, there are so many more stories about fictional characters and stories, such as Harry Potter, Sherlock, Avengers, and so on and so forth.
"His bright forest green eyes locked on my ocean blue eyes, and I fidgeted in my floral print leggings and cardigan"
So my ocean blue eyes told him OK.
His eyes held a look of relief that I had agreed and I could see how the sparkle in his eyes were telling me 'yo mamasita wanna grab some froyo?'
^a perfect example
Link.
NOW.
It's pretty fun to write tho