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happy_frog
· 4 years ago
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"It was a dark and stormy night." The narrator thought this was a clichéd way to start a story so he opted for "It was a dark and stormy Daniels" instead.
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roanoke
· 4 years ago
The revision added a depth and rhythm to the opening that otherwise would have made the story sound cheap—and it was anything but cheap.
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karlboll
· 4 years ago
As the narrator congratulated themselves on this literary stroke of genius, the tea grew cold. The sandwich lay uneaten and something stirred in the corner of the room. Something not from this world.
anthracite
· 4 years ago
Then we pan out and see the full advert for Jack Daniels' new flavour "Dark and Stormy"
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